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We pull up to the side of Trinity college and exit the Bus. I stretch my legs, for the first time in hours, and my stomach begins to growl. Now that I am back in Dublin, I know that I need a decent meal.M. J O’Neill’s is just down the street from Trinity College’s front gate. Up a block from Dame Street and onto Suffolk Street. We had visited the pub at one point during our Literary Pub crawl. We only had twenty minutes to slam down a pint so I opted out of eating there. In those twenty minutes however, I remember staring at the food bar and peoples plates; everything looked delicious. As my stomach’s noises become increasingly louder, that exact food I had seen at M.J O’Neill’s is on my mind.
I dodge a double decker bus turning
at the corner and pull the door open into O’Neills. I am sure I have entered
through the gates of Heaven as my nose immediately fills with the scent of
steak, potatoes and Guinness. I beeline for the food bar and wait impatiently
behind a line of irritating old Italian women with cameras. The walls are covered with vintage metal
signs and advertisements. “Drink Guinness it's Good for you!” one says with a
pint of smiling froth. People are
scattered all over the bar, sitting on high chair tables and at small corner booths. I see a Woman’s plate stacked full with mashed
potatoes, Wicklow lamb shepherd’s pie and mushy peas. My cravings start to get
the best of me and I decide to just splurge a little. Most of the menu is over 10euro in the hot food aisle while sandwiches vary from 2-7 euro.
The food options are vast and each looks freaking delicious. I literally cannot decide which meal to get- I wish I could have one of each. All I can think about is a never-ending spiel of all of O’Neil’s fresh cooked food, and then about going back to their sandwich bar for desert. A cute ginger guy with a chef’s hat cuts slices of steaming corned beef. Could I marry him? Would he give me free corned beef if I offer? I decide against it and opt for the breaded stuffed chicken smothered in Irish red cheddar with a pineapple slice on top. The serving size surpasses my fist’s size but I still want to ask for that salmon dressed in white cream sauce and lemon. Rather, I get some rosemary potatoes with soft cooked carrots and a lot of gravy. A Scottish woman cuts the line and gets to walk off with her food before me; I am pissed but let it go as soon as I get to the register. After ordering a Carlsberg, the total is just over 15euro luckily the meal looks like it will be completely worth it. I find a seat at a small high table facing a large screen showing a hurling game.
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First paragraph: As well as having tense shift problems, the paragraph doesn't account for food poisoning. Did it occur only in Belfast, or has the writing been having food poisoning problems since the beginning of the trip? A restaurant review would not ordinarily start with the problem of food poisoning. Also being back in Dublin seems to solve the problem, but there is no clarity as to why.
ReplyDeleteThe review has no real information about the Bar: where is it, how expensive is it, etc. Those are things, among others, that people want to know about.
Last paragraph about game is not clearly integrated. I would leave it out.
I know you both have been commenting on my tense shifts but I am utterly confused as to what would be the right way to tackle the first paragraph. I am trying to stay in the present tense while also trying to reflect upon my past experience in Belfast. Also, why should I expand on the food poisoning thing? At least three people became ill from the food in Belfast but I don’t think that is important enough for me to further explain for my piece. I am simply trying to make clear my desire for a good meal- and my resolution is going to O’Neill’s.
Deletei enjoy your enthusiasm for O'Neills, but I wonder why is food poisoning inevitable in general? Watch the mechanics and especially the tense shifts (I know you've heard that before). Maybe linger a little more on the taste and quality of the food in the last paragraph.
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